Description
Inhabitants of Munia are able to feel people’s “percentage of goodness”. Niki Batsprite is a half good and half bad creature, and he’s the champion of acrobatic flight races. He’s forced to care of Moari, a sweet and lively rabbit from whom the balance of Munia depends on. Pity that Niki is much more interested in his career as an athlete! Will they get along and succeed in keeping their world safe?
Steven Rosia (verified owner) –
Fun story! Interesting to note you are doing this in both English and Italian. Might I suggest finding a friend to proof your English though. Its mostly fine but you have a fair number of spelling mistakes
Keep up the good work!
ComixCentral –
Awarded the CXC Comic of the Week Feb 20-26, 2017.
illumipony (verified owner) –
The writing for this story was painful to read.
It tries to set up so much all at once and never gives any of it the time to show how it’s interesting or why we should care. Main character? Could’ve been an interesting personality if her character wasn’t introduced entirely through completely uninspired dialogue in which her traits or explicitly listed off by the background characters at best, and by herself at the worst. The world? Again, everything we know is bluntly stated through dialogue, in one instance early on it’s done so through one of the most painful exposition dumps I’ve ever seen, in which an announcer character rants about information that he and everyone around him should already know. If I were a school teacher I’d have the words “Show Don’t Tell” capitalized in bright red ink at the top of the page. The plot? Nothing unique in the slightest, and the story gives very little implication that there’ll be anything unique to come.
The artwork? Well, it isn’t on the level of “Oh God, shield your eyes” kind of bad, but there’s some definite improvement to be had here. The backgrounds are easily the biggest concern. Much of it just feels foamed in and lazy, with very little detail beyond the bare minimum of what’s needed to fill the page. There’s also some panels where characters have some really weird shading that makes them appear mirky.
Are there redeeming qualities? Some. There was a joke in there that managed to get a chuckle out of me, and some of the character modles, particularly with the main, do appear somewhat unique.
No where near enough to save this comic though. Not worth your time.